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My fingers bleed words
that my lips cannot say.
When they try to trickle out,
I scowl and turn away.

It may not be contagious,
but it is a disease.
Holding myself deep inside,
it's getting hard to breathe.

Lies come so easy,
to cover up the truth.
It’s like my second nature,
grown from my very youth.

It’s deeper than conviction,
more earnest than a thought.

It’s my way

It’s my life

It is my disease.
Just venting a little--this is something I stuggle with literally every day. Tell me what you think.
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Sporadikos Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2014
Speaks to my soul. 
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rainpeltkitty Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Absolutely amazing poem.  I love it.  It has a great rhythm and I like your word choice.
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Nohimase Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014
great rhythm when read outloud :)
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IMMASCARYBEAR Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Beautiful, I absolutely love this. It's sad that you're going through this, and I understand where you're coming from. I do appreciate though, that you have shared yor emotions so beautifully, without a cry of self-pity. Remarkable work! 
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BlueMeetsBlack Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I like you a lot, will you marry me... pleaseFlynn: ... hi! 
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dog-on-the-floor Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Student Writer
you just described my thoughts exactly, you're really talented
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Vallestin Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wowz
i love dis
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Justanthrfangirl Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This practically describes me right now, great work, I like it.
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AlexaMarie21 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Student Writer
well written. 
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Nestharon Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014   Writer
It sounds like writers block. But yet again, there is a disease which no one acknowledges, and that is overcoming the fear to write what we feel, and it seems you can overcome that. You are a very talented person :)
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madamsarah Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014   Writer
Nicely put.
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Nestharon Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014   Writer
:iconbowplz:
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KatzyDavus Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This describes something I've struggled with for years; thank you for putting it into words. I hope we both heal someday. Heart 
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Darkadia90 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Student Writer
It's very  spiritual poem n i like the way u express it. Very deep. I like Clap 
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ColorGush Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
A very deep message. I can definitely feel your emotion throughout this poem. Great work. 
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EricAMBM Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014   Writer
Very interesting. It seems to describe the urge to write- if that is it, then very accurate. On the plus side, this is how one becomes a good writer.
Your imagery is very good, especially in the first verse, and so is your rhythm. I am not so sure about the slant rhyme between disease and breath
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much for the comment! I just noticed I left the "e" off of "breathe" in that line. Does that help with the rhyme at all?
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EricAMBM Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014   Writer
no, its just that 'disease' and 'breath' don't completely rhyme. When they only kind of rhyme, it is called a 'slant rhyme.' Usually if you are going to use it you use it continuously, having only one seems odd.
Of course, it is your work, so if you disagree, keep it. It still liked it anyway :)
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I see what you're saying now. Thanks again. :heart:
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yo1000 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014
nice but it's not good to lie it's like your lying to yourself sooner or later your start to belive it yourself
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Tori001 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Professional General Artist
Wow, this is a very beautiful poem. In fact, out of all I can recall, this is my favorite. The most true to life. As a writer myself, I know and applaud the effort it must have taken to write this. Each time a writer makes a piece, he breaks off a piece of his heart for his readers to see. From this, I can tell that you must be a truly caring, empathetic and extremely talented person. Thank you for sharing this piece of you with us. 
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slnmten Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I can definitely relate...good write!
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad. Thank you! :hug:
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the-Unknown-111 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
It's beautiful ;u;
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aww, thanks! :happycry:
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the-Unknown-111 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
no problem :dance:
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TheRandomPegasister Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Great poem! I hope you're okay!
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm fine! It's something I'm really used to by now, so it doesn't bother me a lot. Thanks for reading. :huggle:
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shadowmis Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014
your righting is lovely
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Glad to hear it! Thanks. :hug:
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WordElement Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
strong connection threw emotion, nice work
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :thanks:
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KeithxHunter Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this. As a writer and an artist I can totally relate to this awesome poem.
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I appreciate that a lot. :heart:
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GenniGenevieve Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, this really powerful! Nice job with the rhyming, too!
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I'm glad to hear that. :aww:
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Justanthrfangirl Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I almost thought I was reading about myself for a minuete there. Great poetry
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for relating. I really appreciate your comment. :hug:
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Justanthrfangirl Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Your welcome!
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Serperiorpkm2000 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Student General Artist
Oh. My. god. This is basically what I go through every day as well.  This is a lovely poem, and it actually made me think about my life, hahaha...:iconsadnessplz: This is now one of my favourite poems. ever. :iconcutegamzeeplz:
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, thank you so much! :iconblushingtamakiplz:
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Serperiorpkm2000 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Student General Artist
You're welcome! :iconmitskuniplz:
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TheLovelyMorgan Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I think I just found my new favorite poem. :la:
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
*gets the warm fuzzies* I'm so glad you like it! :hug: :happycry:
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VanePyroRocker Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is very very very good, it's sublime! I love it! Great job! Clap :happybounce: Meow :3 Love Nod La la la la
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
OMG! Thank you so much! :iconsupertighthugplz: :iconyaaayplz: :iconrlytearplz:
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VanePyroRocker Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome my friend. It's incredible! ^^
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:blush: :hug:
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VanePyroRocker Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
^^
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ShyDreamer95 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Student General Artist
This is very good :)
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