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Memory is like the tide,
It swells and ebbs;
It's free and wide,
Yet ridden with dregs.

At times it's calm—
Soothing and sweet;
Like a tender balm,
A gentle beat.

It's violent, too—
Coarse and bitter;
Like a vicious coup,
A cruel winter.

In it, I do bask,
Adrift in my mind;
I need only ask
To be lost in time.
Memories -- whether good or bad -- are what make and define us as individuals. It's good to reflect and learn from them often.

"In it do I bask" is the only line I'm not happy with. Any suggestions for alternatives? ^^;

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Meew3 Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014
We should never have the ability to forget or alter memories, because without them the world would shatter.
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Ender-Wings Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I can tell it was you talking, not the keyboard. Favorite/Watch!
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Si1VeR-ReBoRn Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013   Writer
This is awesome!
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AdilaRain Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012   Writer
Great poem!
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! And sorry for the late reply. ^^;
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Kida-neechan Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012
it is realy beautiful,,loved it,,,
how about a mask instead of bask ^^' ?
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :hug:

I was trying to create the idea of becoming lost in memories with that line, so I don't think "mask" would work. I was just worried that the words "in it" sounded strange together, but I think ~tattoofuzzy's idea of adding a comma helped with the flow. :D
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Kida-neechan Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012
your welcome..and ehe i love the way how you write poems
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IronArmy Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
'In it do I bask' isn't a bad line
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, thank you. :aww:
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