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Memory is like the tide,
It swells and ebbs;
It's free and wide,
Yet ridden with dregs.

At times it's calm—
Soothing and sweet;
Like a tender balm,
A gentle beat.

It's violent, too—
Coarse and bitter;
Like a vicious coup,
A cruel winter.

In it, I do bask,
Adrift in my mind;
I need only ask
To be lost in time.
Memories -- whether good or bad -- are what make and define us as individuals. It's good to reflect and learn from them often.

"In it do I bask" is the only line I'm not happy with. Any suggestions for alternatives? ^^;

Copyright 2012 ~ScarletDevil1503. All rights reserved.
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Meew3 Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014
We should never have the ability to forget or alter memories, because without them the world would shatter.
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Ender-Wings Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I can tell it was you talking, not the keyboard. Favorite/Watch!
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Si1VeR-ReBoRn Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013   Writer
This is awesome!
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:iconadilarain:
AdilaRain Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012   Writer
Great poem!
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! And sorry for the late reply. ^^;
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Kida-neechan Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012
it is realy beautiful,,loved it,,,
how about a mask instead of bask ^^' ?
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :hug:

I was trying to create the idea of becoming lost in memories with that line, so I don't think "mask" would work. I was just worried that the words "in it" sounded strange together, but I think ~tattoofuzzy's idea of adding a comma helped with the flow. :D
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Kida-neechan Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012
your welcome..and ehe i love the way how you write poems
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IronArmy Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
'In it do I bask' isn't a bad line
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, thank you. :aww:
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I really like the imagery you put in this. Well done. :star:
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. :heart:
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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Ivorylies Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Student Writer
perfect to describe how memories can be wonderful and painful
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Indeed. Thank you. :huggle:
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Zireael07 Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is brilliant!
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :blush:
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AralisJ Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I like it a lot!
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad, thanks! :heart:
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AralisJ Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome! :)
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BarebackRider2 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
oh so beautiful! I love ur work!
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aww, thank you! :hug:
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lilfixit Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
yeah "within it I bask" might be better.
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. :blush:
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DrkSorceress Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Student Writer
This really speaks to me...I don't know if it's the word choice or the poetic feel to it. Nice work =D
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! :aww:
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DrkSorceress Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome =D
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oneb1gjugg4l0 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012
very nice, great wording choice, very happy i managed to find this one :)
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm happy you found it too! Thank you so much. :heart:
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oneb1gjugg4l0 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012
You're very welcome :)
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tattoofuzzy Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012
Great poem and the imagery is really good! When i read "in it I do bask" the first time it tripped me up a little, but going over it a couple times it seems to work. The word choice is great maybe just add a comma so "In it, I do bask". Only a suggestion though. I really enjoyed reading this :D
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love your suggestion! I thought that the words "in it" sounded strange together, but if you pause with the comma afterwards it doesn't sound so bad. Thank you very much. :hug:
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tattoofuzzy Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012
:hug: You're very welcome! Glad I could help :D
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Piezelle Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Hobbyist
"In it do I bask?" Maybe try to change it to "I lose myself in it"
...unless it's supposed to rhyme with "ask".. agh sorry
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Right, I was trying to rhyme with "ask." Thanks for the suggestion though! :heart:
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noorelven Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012
Intense and deep!

AWESOME!
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
THANKS! :tighthug:
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noorelven Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012
Welcome :D
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GoldonSparow Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
So true
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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GoldonSparow Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hey have fun with the move hope it goes well and keep spreading da love
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chalekam Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Perfect rhyme scheme and pace. I read it all out loud. As an alternative for 'in it do l bask' why not 'i wallow and bask?'
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Really? That's great to hear. Thank you for the feedback. :heart:
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BirdiLover Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
A beautiful poem! In the end, it made me think of the things i'd like to forget about.
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:( Oh, I'm sorry. :huggle:
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BirdiLover Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No, don't be! It was a truly wonderful poem.
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StarCrystalShattered Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Student General Artist
This is a really wonderful poem. Love the rhyme scheme!
"In it do I bask" ...I think I can see why you might not be happy with that line. I second almond9's suggestion of "Within it I bask"; it would help the flow :D
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! I think I will use that suggestion. ;)
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killuaxme Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012
i like it and it's rhyming. good work
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ScarletDevil1503 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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